He says he loves her
He fell in love with her blue eyes
Her long blonde hair
Her dazzling smile
He says he loves her
And that's all right with me
I watch them talk together
And I'm so happy
They're walking hand-in-hand
And it's obvious she adores him
I never would have guessed
But I think I understand
He says he loves her
She's his "Daddy's little girl"
And even though they just met
He says he loves her
Well, that's very kind of you, I'm not sure it's so well deserved It's from when I introduced my daughter to her father for the first time when she was about a year and a half years old. This was written way back then, and I couldn't actually find the one I wrote, so this is not exactly the original -- I was just winging it as I remembered it.
He went "head over heels" and she obviously adored him from that very first meeting. Interesting how "blood will tell."
I'd love to read some of your work!
Roz
That's great Farseer, and there's no way ever that it could not be "so well deserved"! I just wish I had had that kind of thing with my dad .
Though with this part;
"They're walking hand-in-hand
And it's obvious she adores him
I never would have guessed
But I think I understand"
I personally think it would fit better as something like;
He says he loves her
And it's obvious she adores him
I never would have guessed
But I think I understand
or something, since then it'd still be 4 stanzas, 4 lines each, and a "He says he loves her" on each. Anyways, just a thought, good poem!
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