My Fault

My Fault - Sciences, Education, Art, Writing, UFO - Posted: 15th Oct, 2005 - 2:23am

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11th Oct, 2005 - 12:40am / Post ID: #

My Fault

I guess this poem speaks for itself. I'm in some kinda mood these days!..


My Fault

Why not tell her you dont love her.
Because you do.

You love her harsh words, her blatant lies
And the guilt she uses to turn your accusations.

Why not tell me that you love me.
Because you dont.

You dont want my kind words whispered in your ears
My warm caress when she hurts you
My overwhelming passion expressed in a kiss.

Why dont I let you go.
Because I cant.

I think about our entwined hands
The love I know I can show you
And the baby boy I want to give to you.

Why do you do this to me

Because I let you.

Reconcile Edited: cookie on 11th Oct, 2005 - 12:46am



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Post Date: 14th Oct, 2005 - 3:19am / Post ID: #

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Wow, this is a very sad poem. This poem made me a little depressed for a bit. But onto the meat of the work. Very descriptive and full of angst. At first it seems free form, but I didn't see the pattern till the third read. 2/3 until the end lends structure to the body of the poem. Good job of expressing your heart on paper, I hope sunnier days are coming.

15th Oct, 2005 - 2:23am / Post ID: #

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I'm sorry, it wasnt meant to make anyone depressed. But I guess poetry is meant to evoke some type of emotion, so it must have served it's purpose.

I'm glad you thought it was well written though.
I wasnt sure how it would be accepted seeing as though it deals with the controversial topic of adultery, so thank you for being open minded enough to accept it for what it is..a personal expression




 
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