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An Untitled Poem Of Mine

Last night, when I was making my bed, I had a sudden urge to write. So, I grabbed a pen and went to town. This poem was written in probably a total of 3 minutes, so it's not exactly the greatest poetry, but I am pretty pleased as I wasn't putting to much effort into it. Constructive comments are always welcomed and highly appreciated!

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One shallow eye,

Be it black or white,

Will not see it.

They'll brush upon

Their velvet red petals,

And play in their green fields.

Missing our tarnished augment stature's,

And dull, jagged shrub.

We lead to open oxygen,

With infinite fruit filled tree.

They play in their world fantastical,

And die before us on bent knee.

Mine Poem Untitled An

Sounds medieval in nature, as usual a good play with words, but I am not sure I understand your title or is that you really did not have a title?

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Thank-you very much! and no, I do not have a title. If you have any suggestions for one that would be great though!

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I enjoyed your poem, although I like poems with more rimes. I'm not a poetry fan, but yours gave me an idea and I have a suggestion for the title: "Quietly". I hope you like it.

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I would probably name it 'Mystical Dream' or 'Knight's Vision', something of that nature to keep the tone, but of course in the end you need to interpret what you are seeing in your prose.

An Untitled Poem Of Mine

nice poem. I thought it sounded really creative and the word choice was unusual, but since one theme for this site is mideval, it fits.