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That poem is awsome. I have never heard something like that before. I have written in many poetry contests and have even been published 3 times, but wow you have the gift.  :)

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That poem is awsome. I have never heard something like that before. I have written in many poetry contests and have even been published 3 times, but wow you have the gift

Feel free to share some with us.

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Yes! we would love to read your poems Vale by the way, welcome to our forum! It's nice to have ya here.

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Well i am not much of a poetry person but here it goes...

stupid typical lust poem but enjoy

-he who will remain nameless -  

Can't you accept a complement that directed your way?
Or can you not find the reply that you want to say
Why do you laugh when I lose my hat in the breeze?  
Can you tell me how really feel please
Look into my green eyes
I promise you that I will tell no lies
I like what I see and I see what I like
Do you feel the same? Maybe someday you might
But I don't say a word of how I think
Cause if rejected I"d turn a deep shade of pink
So I talk with an insignificant lot of words
Afraid that might raw soul will be heard
By the naive likes of you
Who I feel for out of the blue
I don't know what to do
So I"ll leave the first move up to you

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Hears a poem that I've been working on for a while.

                     Tomorrow
 If tomorrow never comes,
   Will you still be here?
 If tomorrow never comes,
    Would you still love me, dear?

 If tomorrow never comes,
      Will you still care?
  If tomorrow never comes,
       Would you still dare?

 If tomorrow comes,
     Will you fear?
 If tomorrow comes,
     Would you despair?

I wrote the first verse when I was still going steady with my ex girlfriend. The second was after she broke up with me, and the third was when I  was going through a  hard time.
Please let me know if it is good or crappy. I am thinking that it is pretty sad  piece of poetry. It is by no means my best.

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I think it is pretty good, although I think it should end on either a more positive or reflective note.

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Vale, I think is a great poem! not only because it's good technically but also because you wrote and it reflects on it your feelings. I think is awesome. As JB said maybe you can add something positive in the end to make someone smile. ;D

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Bacterica tell time better than me? *laugh* I would be lost without technology, you boomers better not reply either talking about in your day.